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This is a short story I wrote. It is "complete" in that it has a beginning, middle, and end, but it could probably be made better and/or lengthened.

Protagonist should remain nameless. First person. Keep to the style; from the kid's perspective.

Discussion

I like it. I like the tone, the cryptic nature of what is going on. It is an interesting balance between the innocence of childhood experimentation and the genuine risks of pyromania! There would be a few places the grammar and such could be smoothed out, but not too much. I like the straightforward, naive-seeming narration.

I wonder did you intend this to be a fragment of a longer narrative or a stand-alone story?

Seamussweeney 13:52, 25 January 2011 (UTC)